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Why smoking should be banned ?


Nowadays, cigarettes and other smoking devices become popular day by day. People waste a huge amount of money just because they are depend on the cigarettes. 
There are several reasons why smoking must be banned. First of all, the smokers are the worst examples for the young generation. They smoke that children imitate the actions of adults as they see what they do, so that’s why it must be forthwith prohibited to smoke . Some children start smoking due to the fault of adults since they don’t understand how harmful smoking is . 

Secondly, non-smokers get more harm than smokers. This due to the fact that non-smokers inhale toxic fumes while smokers exhale them. It is also known that some people have an allergic reaction to smoking, and the inhales from the cigarettes many lead them to the fatal outcome. My best friend has an allergic reaction to smoking. Ones she had bad troubles with her health and she even has been fainted several times . 

Moreover, smoking is harmful to the environment as well. It’s out of question that smoking brings negative aspects to people; however smokers not aware of that smoking causes a huge damage to our nature . To be fair and square, some politicians and economics try to keep in a secret that it is necessary to recycle one tree to make 300 cigarette papers. Yet, we are in modern life, and people are developing new things , there are alternatives to the cigarettes. For example, vapes, IQOS and so on . But it is also unhealthy and they also has bad effect on people . 

Taking into consideration that smoking damages our environment. The government should take a decision to eliminate smoking . People should think about their future , their children . 

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    1. Nigyar,
      what sorce(s) of information have you used to write this essay? It was one of the requirements of this task. Without using some sources in your work it resembles a EGE essay
      Things to consider:
      Thesis statement: not specific enough
      smoking devices become popular day by day > it's a process
      they are depend on the cigarettes. : WF of the V
      some politicians and economics: politicians are people; economics is a subject
      What is the source of information in paragraph 4
      It’s out of ART question that smoking brings negative **aspects (WW) to people
      however smokers LINK Verb not aware of that smoking causes
      Concluding paragraph: further development necessary possibly through using one of the techniques for conclusions. Here is one resource you can concult: http://writing2.richmond.edu/writing/wweb/conclude.html

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    2. Content: 4
      Organisation: 3
      Mechanics: 4
      Language: 4
      Referencing: --

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